增强英语四级、六级写作语句表现力的有效方法
内容摘要：一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。1.把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：weak: the trees are bare. the grass is brown
一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
n1.把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
nweak: the trees are bare. the grass is brown. the landscape seems drab.
nrevision:the brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
nor: the landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
n2.将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
n1) weak: the team members are good players.
nrevision: the team members play well.
n2) weak: one worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness.
nrevision: one worker’s plan eliminates tardiness.
n3.在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：
n1) weak: there is o opportunity for promotion.
nrevision: o opportunity for promotion exists.
n2) weak: here are the books you ordered.
nrevision: the books you ordered have arrived.
n二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
n1. poor: my supervisor went past my desk.
nbetter: my supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
n2. poor: she is a careful shopper.
nbetter: she compares prices and quality.
n三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
n1. weak: the organization has been supported by charity.
nbetter: charity has supported the organization.
n2. weak: the biscuits were stacked on a plate.
nbetter: mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
n四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
n1. wordy: my little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
nimproved: my little sister prefers chocolate milk.
n2. wordy: we are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
nimproved: we have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
n3. redundant: we had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
nimproved: we had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
n4. redundant: my sister and i bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
nimproved: my sister and i bought the same dress in different stores.
n五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
n1. weak: they will ot agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
nimproved: they will ot agree to any of his proposals.
n2. weak: i eed her financial input before i can guesstimate our expenditures ext fall.
nimproved: i eed her financial figures before i can estimate our expenditures ext fall.
n1.把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
nweak: the trees are bare. the grass is brown. the landscape seems drab.
nrevision:the brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
nor: the landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
n2.将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
n1) weak: the team members are good players.
nrevision: the team members play well.
n2) weak: one worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness.
nrevision: one worker’s plan eliminates tardiness.
n3.在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：
n1) weak: there is o opportunity for promotion.
nrevision: o opportunity for promotion exists.
n2) weak: here are the books you ordered.
nrevision: the books you ordered have arrived.
n二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
n1. poor: my supervisor went past my desk.
nbetter: my supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
n2. poor: she is a careful shopper.
nbetter: she compares prices and quality.
n三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
n1. weak: the organization has been supported by charity.
nbetter: charity has supported the organization.
n2. weak: the biscuits were stacked on a plate.
nbetter: mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
n四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
n1. wordy: my little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
nimproved: my little sister prefers chocolate milk.
n2. wordy: we are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
nimproved: we have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
n3. redundant: we had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
nimproved: we had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
n4. redundant: my sister and i bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
nimproved: my sister and i bought the same dress in different stores.
n五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
n1. weak: they will ot agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
nimproved: they will ot agree to any of his proposals.
n2. weak: i eed her financial input before i can guesstimate our expenditures ext fall.
nimproved: i eed her financial figures before i can estimate our expenditures ext fall.
